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John Fitzbe posted in the group discussion topic "January story - A City Abandoned":
This story is right up my ally. It isn't clear to me, how Rachel knew her rescuer was a psychoand not a boy scout. I had trouble figuring out who was saying what in the truck's flatbed. The protagonist took it in stride, discovering his ...
John Fitzbe posted in the group discussion topic "January story - The Curse":
It seems to me that the fetish aspects of the story would be improved by changing the perspective of the witches torture to that of the two young masterbating monks. I also felt the bird at the end should of had more foreshadowing. The story ended...
John Fitzbe posted in the group discussion topic "Jan. Contest. sorry I'm late. "Dynomite Man" ":
I'm pleased that even a few of you enjoyed my story. I know there is plenty of opportunity for improvement.As I make revisions and improvements, I see it will be awhile before I feel this story complete. I love making up stories, I ha...
John Fitzbe posted in the group discussion topic "January Contest Story-Explosion":
A good story, Lite on plot development. The fetish could have been developed more too. Clearly killing Clair aroused Steve, but it was having sex with her dead body that got him off. I would have liked it more had they talked about Steves desire f...
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